Wednesday, January 21, 2009
Friend prompt
Do consider yourself as a nice friend? I consider myself as a nice friend. That's how I would describe myself as nice. I feel that if friends can't be nice to each other the friendship can't last. Being nice is something I always have to do, because I can't imagine myself being rude or mean to my friends. If I'm nice to my friends is because they're nice to me. If friends aren't nice to each other the friendship would be filled with hate and friends would be fighting all the time. If my friends aren't nice to me I can't be nice to them. Friendship is valuble. Being nice make a friendship last for a very long time.
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4 comments:
hey valeria,
you did good staying on topic and it is a vary good story and it is good how you started the sentence although i would work on the hook it would be better if you did a grasping question to start the story so the reader can be intrested in the story, i would also work on the concusion it would look better if you somerized the story telling how you feel about being a nice friend
valeria,
you did a good job by staying on topic n not changing the sudject. you canwork on your hook to make it better. over all you did good.keep it up :)
dear valeria,
you did a rely good job staying on topic and not going into other things.i think that you can work on um well you can work on using more discriptive words.
Valeria,
I think your prompt is great because you stayed on topic. I like your hook and i think you could make better examples of why you think your a good friend.
Sincerely,
Lesly.
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